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    dots Submission Name: My Life Is Like Guerrilla Warfaredots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 651
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    Description:
       It was meant to be a rap song, but I kinda didn't know how to fix it up completely, so I made it like I'm fighting a battle with my life, that I've never fought.


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    dotsMy Life Is Like Guerrilla Warfaredots
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    I'm ready for war,
    Ready for the millennium of,
    Hollowtips and bullet holes,
    Deep beyond the horizon,
    Anything to earn the recognition,
    That my self-esteem is rising.
    I'm always crazed out whenever I hear the truth,
    I live my life in the future,
    Like I run around clones and robot troops,
    Hiding behind timid figures,
    Forever bulletproof.

    How many motherfuckers,
    Wanna play their position,
    I'm a sniper in the game,
    With just one mission;
    To take the enemy out,
    Confronted by guerilla warfare in collision,
    A life of Penitentaries and prisons,
    With no spiritual believe,
    Or God supervision.

    I'm living life in the flesh,
    So anything moving around my zone,
    Can get put to rest,
    I must confess,
    I wish I never was involved in this mess,
    That's why I smoke one to the brain,
    Just to alleviate the stress.




    Submitted on 2006-11-23 20:44:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      your getting more ghetto huh now that your back in LA! im waiting to read something more positive and new from you..and i really like that word "Penitentiary", ima use it as a title to my next poem. thanx for reminding me ;)

    i can say i like this better as a lyric than a poem but keep writing and ill keep reading till the better
    | Posted on 2006-11-23 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


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