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    dots Submission Name: almostdots
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    Author: gloomyanddoomy
    ASL Info:    17,female
    Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 81/426/527
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 472
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    dotsalmostdots
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    I droped out of school
    at the age of 16 to move to LA
    Where I was almost famous for almost a day

    And I almost had you
    But I guess that doesn't cut it
    I loved you
    I wished you woulda loved me too

    I almost held up a grocery store
    Where I woulda did five years
    and then seven more
    Cause I almost got popped for a fight with a thug
    Cause he almost made off with a bunch of good drugs
    That I almost got hooked on cause you ran away
    And I wish I would have had
    the nerve to ask you to stay

    I almost forgot to say something else
    I almost wrote a song about you today
    But I tore it all up and then I threw it away

    You kept me guessin'
    And now I'm destined
    To spend my time missin' you
    And I almost had you


    I almost wished you woulda loved me too
    wished you woulda loved me too




    Submitted on 2006-11-23 21:29:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Good one.. i can feel the dedication and longing..
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by E. Audine | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it ~!!~
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by Dramaqueen | [ Reply to This ]


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