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    dots Submission Name: Regret...dots
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    Author: Lisa-Marie
    ASL Info:    39/Female/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 39/38/12
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       My cousin Tim recently killed himself, it seems the sadness, hurt and at times anger just never stops. I am trying to pour these feelings out of myself and my thoughts often tinged heavily with regret flow out into my writing. I'm surviving...


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    dotsRegret...dots
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    I never had the chance to say goodbye...
    Now I cry...
    I cry with regret of things left undone...
    Of words never spoken...
    God how cold is this sun...

    There's a chill to my bone when I think of you...
    and the sky has suddenly become a different shade of blue...
    The blue is a sadness that seeps deep within...
    For now I can see where I stop...
    and now you begin...

    I'll see you again Tim...
    in another place...
    May the angels surround you...
    and fill you with grace...

    Until then my sweet cousin...
    Unfold your wings...
    Fly and be forever free...
    Of these worldly things.





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      take something sad and look at in a positive way... well as positive as you can get... i love it and am adding it to my favorites...
    Katana
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
      this is such a sentamental poem and so beautiful the way you said that the moon changed different shades of blue I mean what you are going through is not a beautiful thing but the way that you turn a hard time into something beautiful is something noone can take away I hope that your days begin to get brighter and remember regreting the past only troubles your future, I hope you can check out my work and check out one called ALL WE MUST REMEMBER IS LIFE. you have to click where it says see all at the bottom of my works but I will pray 4 you and I love this poem

    much LOVE
    JAmes
    | Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
      I wish I had read this before commenting on the first piece. But I feel no need to say anything about changing your poem.
    The questions loom and we try to answer them, and especially why.
    I am so sorry for your loss, it makes so little sense sometimes.

    All I can do is send you healing and hope that the moments keep bringing light as time moves on. Rest easy and write, that's what I've done. Love to you and your family, and may you find healing soon.

    I'm glad you're here, this is good place to be right now.

    Nan

    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      You have a wonderful poetic sense...this poem, too, is ineffably sad, but hopeful...very well done...I liked it muchly, bravo...bravo...Michael
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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