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    dots Submission Name: cocoondots
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    Author: lauren hamill
    ASL Info:    24/f/can't say really.
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 52/30/14
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 566
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1303



    Description:
       love, what else?


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    dotscocoondots
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    Sorrow, wrapped up
    In me like cocooned
    Covers. I curl
    My tiny fingers,
    Around the silk trim,
    Lifting and letting
    All the light in.

    Go away!
    I grab the fray
    With my hand,
    Engulfing myself
    With the heated breath
    Of the morning after.
    I dont want to live
    today, I want to keep
    all the cold locked in.

    I lay there, all wrapped
    Up in my sorrow. Sunlight
    Has never seen, such
    A frightened enemy.
    Rain, rain, I pray
    For rain to fall
    Upon this
    Sunshiny city. On
    This internally damp day.
    Rain would make this all
    Okay.

    I could lay here in my
    Pity, bathe in all my gloom.
    Never leave my room,
    Cry, cry, cry, until
    I feel it has all
    Drained from beneath
    This sin, which dirties
    My skin, but,
    I did
    nothing wrong.
    For to love, was supposed
    To mean I was strong.
    Yet, here I am,
    The epitome of weakness,
    Holding it all in
    For so long. And now
    Letting it all out
    To the fabric
    Of this song of
    Mourning and deep
    Deep, self-loathing.






    Submitted on 2006-11-24 01:21:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i feel this one... the want to shut out the world forever... stay in your bed under the warm blankets and dream of a perfect life...
    Katana
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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