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    Author: lauren hamill
    ASL Info:    24/f/can't say really.
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 52/30/14
    Words: 268
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 620
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       the love of my life, but not so much anymore


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    dotsthen, nowdots
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    Remember when I lay on our bed
    Buried in the breath and smell of us together?
    Was it so long ago, we rolled around
    In the hay behind our little school house, in the shadows?

    A modern romance, a picture-perfect fairy tale,
    We were. I remember sitting around, smelling the
    Musk of your man, finding it sexy—you—un-showered
    For days. In your natural state
    You were. Nights of us drinking in the dark
    Playing the game lovers play best, pretending our future
    Was limitless. Oh, the sun shone so brightly then.
    You were my future then. I was your woman,
    Then. Something, unforeseen, cut through our
    Curtain of romance,

    Then,

    Garbage bags of clothes, shit I had
    Long forgotten in the throws of us.
    Pictures put away in pretty boxes, discarded
    For days, and brought out on weekends. This was
    All really happening. I remember the day,
    Of amazement, gazing in your eyes, feeling
    My life had never begun before I had felt
    You in my arms. How would I ever
    Live without you there, feeling your skin?

    Now,

    I look at you, wondering, how
    It ever was, when we felt that lust.
    It was more, I feel it was, you will forever
    Be in my heart. The hate I felt for you is
    Disappearing now. Acceptance has taken
    It’s thrown now. Life’s moved on now.
    Perfection is nothing but a façade, now. For real
    Perfection knows no boundaries, just like love.
    So,
    Then,
    I say good-bye,
    Now,
    To what it was,
    Then.




    Submitted on 2006-11-24 02:05:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lust disguised as love or was it really love that faded away to something meaning less? it will be another add to my favorites
    Katana
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
      A classic lover's lament that entirely too many of us can identify with...well told...set up superbly and executed wonderfully well...just the right, even perfect details who set and spring the trap of saddness and loss...very fine, indeed...bravo...bravo...Michael
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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