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    dots Submission Name: Day Dreamerdots
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    Author: Glassy Eyed
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 550/427/187
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 332
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    dotsDay Dreamerdots
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    She was lost in her own little world,
    Never wanting to come out
    To see the real world for what it was.

    A place where discretion is highly valued,
    To, at least, a certain extent.

    If you're gay, it'd rather not be known,
    But if it manages to get out,
    The whole world will know.

    She liked her land of illusions,
    Wher she could safely be herself
    And there was no one to tell her it was wrong,
    Or bad, that she was the way she was.

    Obstinately, she refuses to leave her illusions behind.
    Whenever someone points out her defiance,
    She slams the walls of her world in their face.

    She just wants to be left alone to daydream.




    Submitted on 2006-11-24 08:34:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow. speaking of the real world and compairing it with someone that is daydreaming and how they long to stay in their own world where they are allowed to be who they are where they do not have to hide the real person that they are. and how when this person feels as if others are pointing out their flaws she throws those walls up and allows no one in... allows no attemtps this is good.. i can relate to this as well.. great job

    ~*Jackie*~
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting piece in that most of the remarks made in the poem are presented as statements, declarations, however, the reader, in retrospect, could see them all as questions--actually self-questioning...so I think it is actually a very introspective piece...very finely done...bravo...bravo...bravo...Michael
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]



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