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    dots Submission Name: Measure Up Sondots
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    Author: Glassy Eyed
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 550/427/187
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Political
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    dotsMeasure Up Sondots
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    Measure up son, you'll soon be recruited
    For that war you know nothing about
    And never wanted to be a part of.

    With their politics, they'll rip away your freedom,
    And take you into their grasp in a second,
    Because you're
    Young
    Strong
    and
    Unwilling.

    First they'll instill a sense of worthlessness in you,
    Rip away your shreads of dignity
    And let you lie face down in the dirt.

    Then they will build up your self-confidence,
    Tell you you're a hero
    And a great asset to your nation.

    But you're only infantry.
    As soon as you get out of boot,
    There will be ten more to take your place.

    Measure up son, you were recruited
    For that war you know nothing about
    And never wanted to be apart of.




    Submitted on 2006-11-24 08:35:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I find that I agree with your opinion on this topic, it's a senseless thing, though I realize that it's near impossible to stop all people from fighting it's still stupid. I enjoyed the idea, but the flow in the middle is a little choppy, though the ending was executed perfectly. Kudos? Coodis? Gat-splatin-ganglian? No?... How about good job then? Good job it is then.

    Acid
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Acid | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah war! Practically my favourite motif both to read and write about.
    "With their politics, they'll rip away your freedom,"
    that line stood out to me.
    They take you young, smite, smother, and get you to kill people, then say you're some sort of hero.
    Politicians.
    But the military may also have some direct influence on the politics.
    I like the freedom part. Freedom is the right of every human being (anyone who disagrees with this statement can go look up Article X of the UN Declaration on Human Rights), and surprisingly the military is not disbanded because it disagrees outright with that article. Why do we even have a military to start with? It takes up money, lives, and does ridiculous things to the young man's mind.
    Long live peace!
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      you have wrote a very good poem here,with all the stuff going on in iraq, afghanistan and god knows where else. thats the army takes away your dignity, self respect and makes you a moron unable to think for yourself.i was never in the army, we dont have draft in scotland, but i see what it does to the germans here.good work, keep it up.
    ps i remmember a song from the eighties called "19" that was the average age of the gi,s in the vietnam war, nineteen, just kids.
    gerry
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with morriscool4 this is great, you get your point across very well i also like how your repeated yourself at the end of your poem. very nice. and this poem is so true in so many ways. i mean ...there may be a draft there may not be one .but with bush.. who knows. nevertheless this is great work hope to read more from you

    ~*Jackie*~
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      woah i like this, you deffinatly know how to get your point accross, keep up the writing. i like how you repeated the first phrase at the end, i think it was the perfet way to close it. over all i give it a nine out of ten! good job
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by morriscool4 | [ Reply to This ]



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