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    dots Submission Name: Dialog with the Devildots
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    Author: Non-Sens-Uality
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 67/80/53
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsDialog with the Devildots
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    -Time made my life unsacred, still
    I hope for my redemption.
    Why is the clock so slow, I feel
    Not far is now detention.

    I ask myself If I am real
    But nobody could tell
    So I will now unlock the seal
    My spirit I will sell.

    -Too many times, these words I hear
    And have, and will forever
    When desperation cheats on fear
    When "always" becomes "never".

    When your little empty mind
    Tries to touch Good through Evil
    If the Master was not "kind"
    You turn to me - The Devil.

    -I seek the truth, even if bitter
    I ask for light, and not for bliss
    And now I will summon the Critter
    I want the lucid poisoned kiss.

    I am so tired of sweet lies
    And ignorance is pressing
    Against my bloodfilled, tainted eyes
    A promise of the blessing.

    -They do not seek the truth, child dear
    They seek a tender touch
    They want just to forget the fear
    But you know they want too much.

    They want the truth? It's pain they want.
    Something so dark and shocking
    That could awake the dead infant
    That once on heavens gates was knocking.




    Submitted on 2006-11-24 09:58:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I didn't really understand what the character was asking the devil.

    It's like the character was trying to stick up for every person who has made a soul deal with the devil.

    I don't know,
    But nice job,

    Lia
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, my favourite illusionist is inspired. My my, isn't that a dark beauty. You truly venture far into the fibers of your surreal mind. And what a fascinating mind it is. Brilliant experience for a reader of my genre.
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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