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    dots Submission Name: Unwanted Lettersdots
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    Author: Glassy Eyed
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 550/427/187
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 217
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 464



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    dotsUnwanted Lettersdots
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    Her heart beat faster,
    Holding onto her mail,
    She only saw one letter.

    Shaky hands tore away at the seal,
    And quickly removed the letter from its clothes.
    The letter laid there, naked and bare.

    It tried to cover itself,
    Folding over until she could only see the back,
    But it did no good.

    As she read the letter,
    Nothing mattered anymore,
    "Dear Jane..."




    Submitted on 2006-11-24 10:14:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      haha, until the last line i was kind hoping it would be an admissions letter... I like how you personified the letter, making it be naked... and when you described it "trying to cover itself" i could very easily see a letter refolding after being pulled out of the envelope. so great imagery, and good job.
    Thanks for the read.
    Guermo
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Guermo | [ Reply to This ]
      awww this is sad... but i like your writting tech.

    ~*Jackie*~
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]



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