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    dots Submission Name: Only One Life To Livedots

    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 922
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       Trying to change my ways and all, just staying away from drugs and the drama that sorrounds me when I'm not doing good.

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    dotsOnly One Life To Livedots

    I only have one life to lead,
    In the search to do good deeds,
    Cause I'm tired of internal bleeds,
    And the constant desire
    To fullfill all my needs;

    I can see the light up ahead,
    It's clarity opposite of darkness instead,
    Where everyone can cherish life and death,
    Every heart beat and every breath,
    And the infinite peace of mind in your head.

    My destiny is what I chose,
    Beyond dark shadows and crossroads,
    But ultimately before it gets worse,
    I choose a path of good for the most,
    Am I reaching this place of which I wrote,
    Not there yet,
    But getting very close.

    Submitted on 2006-11-24 13:08:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it's pretty good... that's all i'm gonna say
    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]
      alright!! way to make the change!! not everyone can do that, whether its drugs or cutting or something else. trust me, i know. i liked the poem. in some places, your rhyme got a little loose, but it wasnt too bad. your rhythm stayed consistant and everything. and you're right. you only get one shot at this thinkg called life. make it count.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]

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