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The Story of Sydney

Author: Trifecta
ASL Info:    14.male.Somewhere
Elite Ratio:    5.58 - 32 /34 /28
Words: 95
Class/Type: Poetry /Childrens
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This is a poem I wrote for my nephew on Thanksgiving, because we were bored, and he asked me to tell him a story. So, I made this up, and wrote it down later.

I like it, so, what do you think?

The Story of Sydney

There once was a girl named Sydney
She needed to get a new kidney
But lo and behold
The story unfolds
That no one knows where she has gone

They searched for her in New York
They tempted her with some pork
But soon they found out
With some stubborn pout
That Sydney could not be found

So life went on, without poor Syd
Her story passed on to each little kid
So the parents they shout, and call out
When you need a new kidney
Don't end up like poor ol' Sydney

Submitted on 2006-11-24 13:21:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Cute poem. It's funny and has a nice rhyme scheme.
| Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by Two Meters Away | [ Reply to This ]

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