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war prayeries-prieres de guerres


Author: sickly
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greetings to all eliteskillers.i have once again worked very diligently in creating a written work that i think should be considered as an artistic milestone for me personally, and perhaps in the secret history of individualism as something to be respected.i would have to ask the webmaster, jimmy, to remove the `ignore user` detail from my page on this site, as i have to be considered only as unique in my troubled times, and not vile or vindictive.i have pushed it all to the limit with this creation of mine and have many different versions, but this one was at a creative peak after a long period of development.i made a big decision with this one so to never face my downfall.good luck and farewell to all.


war prayeries-prieres de guerres



god give me what no one else wants and prevent me from dying, and make me live forever, as necessary, but what i have in what i am, all began with a conception creation act between my father and mother, between the bedsheets late one night during the first winter of 1962, and i was born during the second, and into all, and against the terminal, terroristic tyrannies of life and living through these suicide deathwars, but surviving, resisting, and revenging over all of the viciousnesses of the victimries, to always be going through the most impossible and extremest of endless tests.for you god, i persevered with the planning and construction in the revolutionary evolutionizing of the precision technical perfexion of my mind, spirits, and body.now at the end of the sixth year of the 21st century, during and after the longest ever never over of it all, i, as am, an oblique obligée, emerged in full mastery of the flesh and its' existences in sinlessness' deathlessnesses. comme dans le temps, it's life or death, and it's way after time.i'm a blitzixist aglitter in glamixusses, an alienate, isolate, idolate, in immadnesses and issadnesses, ever being so very baddened and blue.so god, do just this for me without mercy or pity, as for just me, a fated fatist iffatal, from which there will not be any sins or crimes, as an internally exiled immortal in all of eternity.i am in wait for you god, living my life as me secretly...




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  An artistic milestone you say.Maybe for you personally but sadly probably not for anyone except yourself.I'm assuming this poem is about you.So you were born,like everyone else-congratulations. Are you saying you have mastered immortality or that you are a slave to god?Either that or your life has no meaning except for the belief that you will meet god in heaven after death-which is very sad.
It appears that during your inane ramblings you throw in a load of ridiculous words to make your work sound more intellectual.Actually it has the opposite effect.<I'm a blitzixist aglitter in glamixusses>??? What?!
Maybe it has some meaning for you but you can't expect anyone else to comprehend such nonsense.Do you write only for yourself?
Good luck
A.C
| Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by Asakura Cowboy | [ Reply to This ]


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