Description: A random scribbling before going to bed. Actually, I was feeling quite happy when I wrote this poem, the thoughts that went into it were really random and the images were quite unconnected with my life! I just wanted to write a poem titled Black Hole, and this is what I came up with :D
Written 4th August 04
Black Hole -------------------------------------------
I'm falling deeper
The light fades away
Deeper, Darker.
The empty chamber
No sounds, No voices.
The emptiness encloses me,
like a dark poison
it spreads through me.
This black hole into which I've fallen
I cannot get back out.
A bottomless Pit.
No End.
No Pain.
Nothing.
Now that's more like it. I agree with Opti_pessi-mist, dark poison should be capitalised to agree with the rest of the poem. Meanwhile, good write. Quite easy to understand. Cheers, looking forward to more. Azuire
This poem is deep. It fits the title perfectly. Why is it that you feel this way? I would have capitalized "dark poison". It would have gone along with the whole feel of helplessness in the poem. Good write
Submission Name: Black Hole
