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    dots Submission Name: I couldn't do it...dots

    Author: pixie_007
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 45/77/63
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsI couldn't do it...dots

    You seem a world away,yet I can reach you in a day.
    I wish I could have seen you before you went away.
    I wanted to call and hear ur voice and maybe even say "I still love you".
    But as much as I wanted to tell you I just couldn't pick up the phone and call.
    What exactly would I tell you then,I'm sure I'd sound like a fool to you.
    Saying empty words that you somehow forgot.
    I dont think I could do that,push something that you try so hard to avoid.
    Yet I keep wondering if u somehow still feel something for me in your heart.
    It will take time to heal I know,I just have this fear that you would have given up on me before then.
    And as much as I wanted to tell you I just couldn't pick up the phone and call.
    Because everything that was going through my mind right now isn't even close to half of what I wanted to say...

    Submitted on 2006-11-24 15:03:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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