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    dots Submission Name: *PassionBlaze*dots
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    Author: pixie_007
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 45/77/63
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    I loved the feeling of your hands on my skin and as you touched me,
    all the secret fantasies spun in my head.
    As we lay there comsumed by each other's consistancy,
    my mind raced and you had me right where I wanted to be.
    I could feel your need growing as your kisses became stronger.
    You wanted more,so much more.. and I knew what you wanted.
    I could feel it burning from inside my heart to the edges of my soul.
    My whole body shook with pleasure when you touched me so gently,
    I wanted to feel you inside of me and moan when you do it to me slow and hard...
    Even though you tried to hide it,I could feel you wanted more...
    Because i wanted just as much...




    Submitted on 2006-11-24 15:05:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Man, I am a passion writer lover! I love writing and reading about passion...to write and let others see your experience in love-making (although I haven't had any) I still feel as if with me not knowing at all, I make guesses and assumption on everything you need to give and take...and I just hope there is a part two to this because without it...this it feels incomplete!

    Overall: The effort, and the choice words, the way you flowed your words together were slightly choppy at times, but really smooth at times. Pretty good attempt, I think!
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]


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