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Author: pixie_007
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Class/Type: Poetry /Happy
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I'm hoping this will tickle your funny bone,
So you'll feel crazy when you laugh alone.
Something will happen,but you'll be okay.
But I warn you,it lasts for more than a day!

It is so easy to give and so easy to take
And one of the easiest things you can make!

So take this to heart and heed what I say.
This is something to think about every day.
In the shower or your dreams as you sleep,
This is a secret that you must NEVER keep!

You can use it in Love to show your Emotion,
You can use it in War to slow the Commotion.
You can swop or collect 'em like magic beads,
& once its planted,it spreads like crazy seeds!

It seems to make everything else worthwhile,
This wonderfully beautiful thing called a smile!

Submitted on 2006-11-24 15:05:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i wonder why no one commented on this yet!!! its a work of brilliance good write! i like it went people smile! and even from the name its almost a secret whats going on until the end, it kept me reading! the flow is a little slow in places but the happy factor more than makes up for it! keep on the keepin on!
| Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by Saphire Twiligh | [ Reply to This ]

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