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    dots Submission Name: *Faithless*dots
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    Author: pixie_007
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 45/77/63
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dots*Faithless*dots
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    I woke up one morning and he wasn't there,
    My sweet,a man for whom I deeply care.
    Beside me on the pillow he had left me a note,
    But when I read it,my beautiful heart broke.

    And as I lay there alone in my bed,
    My world came apart all in my head.
    Within an instant I started to cry,
    As my wonderful world fell from the sky.

    "I'm not one of your puppets," it said,
    "you wnt play me 4 a fool any longer" I read.
    What have I done,am I guilty of this crime?
    He doubted me,now his love's no longer mine.

    It will be hard to move on,this I know,
    And if this is what you want,then I'll go.
    But just so you know,I wnt stop caring 4 you,
    Because everything I'v said so far is still true.

    And so I lay me head back down on my pillow,
    And silently feel my heart leave with my soul.




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