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*Faithless*


Author: pixie_007
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*Faithless*




I woke up one morning and he wasn't there,
My sweet,a man for whom I deeply care.
Beside me on the pillow he had left me a note,
But when I read it,my beautiful heart broke.

And as I lay there alone in my bed,
My world came apart all in my head.
Within an instant I started to cry,
As my wonderful world fell from the sky.

"I'm not one of your puppets," it said,
"you wnt play me 4 a fool any longer" I read.
What have I done,am I guilty of this crime?
He doubted me,now his love's no longer mine.

It will be hard to move on,this I know,
And if this is what you want,then I'll go.
But just so you know,I wnt stop caring 4 you,
Because everything I'v said so far is still true.

And so I lay me head back down on my pillow,
And silently feel my heart leave with my soul.




Submitted on 2006-11-24 15:07:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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