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A passion set apart...


Author: psyko
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Class/Type: Poetry /Vampire
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The Holy One is the man with the stake...
The Great Hunt is to prepare for a Hybernation of sorts...
The Season of Light... We live in the extreme north... It's light out for quite some time...


A passion set apart...



Take my rage, deep inside yourself,
Let anger nourish your need.
Let's tear a hole through time and space,
With passion... Let us bleed.

We'll scatter ourselves, our energy lost,
But we have plenty left to spare.
We have those bodies to nourish us,
They're lying over there.

With your Icy chill, running down my body,
I moan.... you make me ache.
Let's create new life, born of our evil,
It is passion we can make.

Take the rage, of my immortal soul,
And shake as you pull me in.
Quench your thirst for my love,
I care not that we live in sin.

Your murderous touch, it boils my blood,
Your lips I can't resist.
Fill your need to have my evil,
I'll give you eternal bliss....

Feast my love, you'll need your energy,
The Great Hunt is still to come.
We must store up lots of food,
I'll protect you from the Holy One.

A season of light, to threaten our strength,
For this we must prepare.
We can kill all we want,
And live without a care.

The Holy One seeks to cause us harm,
For this he'll surely die!
For you my love, I'll remain awake,
To attack him from the sky.

He'll come in quickly, and he'll strike swift,
Hoping to make us pass...
Fuck that shit, I'll be prepared,
To Kill his sorry ass....




Submitted on 2006-11-24 15:50:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wonderfull!
I love this
I love vampires as well,and I like the surprise ending had me laughing.
Its cool how u set it up tho,the way u phrased everything.
good job
passion filled!
~safire
| Posted on 2007-07-02 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
  I like vampies, not as much as wolves but still quite a lot. So it’s not surprising that I like this poem too.
It’s well written, full of a dark passion, or evil love if you will. I like how you portray the feelings of the "creatures of the dark" as the oppressed, gives a pleasant perspective to the poem.
The person that the poem is about (the one who talks) wants to protect his love (the honourable part), but still they will live without a care (the evil part). I like how these were put together, and with the fact that they need to kill to survive. It can raise a moral debate, and I love those

The last stanza was probably the one that made me remember the poem. It brings a sort of eh... "human" perspective to it. It's a nice contrast to the passion in the rest of the poem
//The Little Good Wolf
| Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by Wolfie | [ Reply to This ]
  i love how you ended this one. there's a kinda tongue-in-cheek humour. darkness, evil and passion, this has everything.
i love how you think...great stuff again.
michelle
| Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  I've been following the ongoing story between you and Michelle! It'b been an entertaining chase! I'm not really into Vamp stories, but the two of you have such skill at it, it's entertaining to follow. You have loads of skill as a writer!
| Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  i really liked the beginining but toward the sixth stanza you kind of lost me, it was like the style changed. but still it was good. i liked the contrast and the wording all but the last stanza which just seems to well i dont know how to put it...when i was reading it the last few lines just seemed wrong but that could be what you want to happen. anyway good poem i really enjoyed it.
ira
| Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]


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