Oh how i long to touch my lips
on yours and just to think
we would have been surprised if
even a thought crossed our
minds but today
we lay here in sweet delight as
hours of passion pass us by.
But one question still remains do
you love me enough to
follow me and listen to
stories being told.
Will you come with me and see
that love changes but never
And then if you drop me the same
question i will speak
and i will say,
"I will follow you to the end
of the earth and that i promise you, my love."
Kind of a stretch going from yesterday not even having the thought of kissing cross your minds to loving each other eternally, but either way there was some very nice places in this piece, especially in the beginning...there just seems as though you skipped over a transition somewhere from friends to forever...?
somethin of true love that even I would quiver at the thought of it. its really nice to read this once in a while though I try not to. hmmmmmmmm this would be nice if your edited it a bit and use it as your voul (spelling, I can never get it right lol. voul as in marriage vouls. spelling errors again...) your explanations of a simple act of loving and staying together forever is really good, jsut some misplaced words here and there. I like it.
This is really a beautiful poem. I'm not surpirised he loved it, I only wish my love would write my something, sigh...Anyway, this has a really good flow to it and the message is very touching. Great write!
'love changes but never grows old' is so beautiful, words everybody would do well to remember. dropme should be corrected but other than that this is very good and your flow is great...very lovey dovey *sniff*