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    dots Submission Name: Identity Washes Down the Draindots

    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 511
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       Not very good... Just a poem I came up with in a minute.

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    dotsIdentity Washes Down the Draindots

    I wash my face
    My identity runs down the drain
    My heart starts to race

    My face is bare
    Revealing the real me
    The part I don't want people to see

    No make up to hide
    My imperfections
    The truth that can't be denied

    Hideous, replusive
    Don't look at me
    I have nothing left to give

    No painted on smile
    Or smooth skin
    I am proof, God makes sin

    My identity goes down the drain
    With it my self-worth
    No rewards for all this work

    So I wash my face
    Revealing the real me
    The things that people will never see.

    Submitted on 2006-11-24 21:01:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      No painted on smile
    Or smooth skin
    I am proof, God makes sin

    How blasphemous, the controversy I love this. I've realized something we are most times hardest on ourselves, we decrease our own selfworth and then that is how how we are perveived. I've been here before matter of fact i still am, just making peace with it i guess, finding the beauty in my own skin.

    Eternally yours,
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very self deprecating in the narrative voice. It is putting a cross a feeling of total lack of self worth. But why? What is the message? Is it that the make-up is a metaphor for secrecy? But if so there is no hint at the secret or why it may be bad to hide it.
    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by nascentpawn | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well written. You've done a great job of expressing how alot of women tend to feel. I think its awful that women, young women are led to believe that leaving the house without a mask is unexceptable. Because eventually the make up we wear hides more than imperfections in the skin and enhances nothing but our insecurities... Very well done.

    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow!! I really like this one. It is so good. I like the mental pic you get as you read it. Keep writing. Good one
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]

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