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    dots Submission Name: Envydots
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    Author: bleeding_sin
    ASL Info:    16/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 54/68/57
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 460
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    Bytes: 373



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       This is for my friend and I. To all are envy.


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    dotsEnvydots
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    See her smile??
    Her warm inbrace.
    She walks with confidence.
    My imperfections realized.
    My list put to test.
    For one day dear god.
    I want to be that.
    To be her.
    You see her with the glasses.
    That hide her eyes.
    Never to be moved.
    She is complte.
    THis is my sin.
    And she is my envy!!




    Submitted on 2006-11-24 21:15:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      yes envy one of the seven deadly sins, but i reckon we all have a bit of envy in us.
    | Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]
      don't we all want to have that kind of confidence which mystefies most of us. i like.
    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by lauren hamill | [ Reply to This ]


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