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    dots Submission Name: Loving You Is Painfuldots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 587
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    Description:
       a poem about the pain of love....Not so good.


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    dotsLoving You Is Painfuldots
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    It hurts to love you
    More then it hurts to kill me
    Something you do so pleasently
    I find myself alone and crying
    My soul is dying
    I love you so much
    but you don't see
    How come you hurt me?
    My pain goes unnoticed
    You don't care enough to ask
    Why most I put on this mask?
    My heart and wrists bleed for you
    I am so lost and don't know what to do.
    I can't stop
    You are the perfect drug
    Using and abusing
    All I want is your love.
    But you won't give it to me
    I am not worth it to you.
    Why must I care?
    When your not ever really there.
    Loving you is pain.
    But I come back.
    Never wanting to be without you again.
    Without you, I'm left with jack.
    So use me and abuse me
    I am here to please
    But whatever you do
    Please don't leave....





    Submitted on 2006-11-24 21:23:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is heart-wrenching and the ending just grabbed me. You move me to tears. If he only knew how much he was hurting you. Maybe you shoud send this to him.

    Be Blessed,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      ahh you're a f uckin good writer. i envy. this piece is very beautiful. just wanting to be loved. i'm adding this to my favorites...
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't stop
    You are the perfect drug
    Using and abusing
    All I want is your love.
    But you won't give it to me
    I am not worth it to you.

    AND

    So use me and abuse me
    I am here to please
    But whatever you do
    Please don't leave....


    Are my favorites. Alot of people fall into the patterns of a false love, and will suffer it all to keep someone they think is worth losing it all for. Sometimes, what you're left with is less than yourself, and that someone you lose yourself for, doesn't care at all. I love this one, Love it! Great write.

    ~Kiki
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. It is a very good write. I like the ryhme flow it has. So keep on writing. You r welcome for your [censored] commet. LOL!!
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]


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