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    dots Submission Name: Awaiting Fire...dots
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    Author: mrmundane
    ASL Info:    20/m/vancouver bc
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 47/88/61
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 108
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 820



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    dotsAwaiting Fire...dots
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    with ethereal hands my subordinate emotions are a mess
    reaching for a solid grip out of emptiness...
    ...insides a blur...
    ...outside's a test...

    obsession fooling words, i had missed
    touches of slight emotional relevance
    and into this hole i have dug for my dreams
    wind me further into hell it seems...

    who can hold a candle to what i have missed...
    so many days alone, so many nights -- anxious
    clouds from the north chase my inner summer moon
    and tomorrow i hold onto, growing dumb by afternoon

    silence in my head is all i wish
    escapism from society -- that skirmishing bitch
    to hell with the lot, with every heart they smother
    the lot of them, they fall, deeper into awaiting fire...




    Submitted on 2006-11-24 23:59:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      reminds me of "the love song for J Alfred Prufrock" i must admit im a t s elliot fan, Very captivating made me wish it was longer.

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    | Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the very descriptive detail used and how you worded all of it. you used a lot of emotion and expressed tons of feelings.

    good job and keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by loco_baby92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Mistyque. Very descriptive and powerful. Beautiful word choice and a sense of darkness in a candlelight. Flames are an inspiration for the hungry.
    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]



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