The eve of love's death -------------------------------------------
she clutches her shattered heart
despartly trying to peice it back together
in vain it crumbles more and slips through her hand
like the sand of her younger days
oh if only she could have stayed there
in the years where innocence was never doubted
where your heart was never released
a place and time where everything was in bloom
but the hourglass tells that we must all leave this time
and step into a world where feeling become scarce
where young men hunt young ladies
rip and tear their hearts from the cages they reside in
the weapon of choice the men swear by
is a single word with the power to create or destroy lives
love a cursed word among some
yet the only way a pigged man can get what he want
when the girl wakes love is dead
and her heart pours from inbetween her ribs
sand in the hourglass or in our hands
love is out of time and with it go all of our hearts
I really like the imagery you've used! Check your spelling though. Also, you haven't capitalised anything, like the first letter of lines. And if you capitalise anything, I think you should also make 'love' into 'Love' to make it stand out more.
"love a cursed word among some" Also, for this line, to make the word love stand out more, try, "Love. A cursed word among some"
Submission Name: The eve of love's death
