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    dots Submission Name: I just don't knowdots

    Author: Orcelandrya
    ASL Info:    18/f/ont
    Elite Ratio:    4.94 - 18/8/9
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       this is about my ex jesse... who oddly i'm finding i wish wasn't my ex after all enjoy

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    dotsI just don't knowdots

    its impossible to fogive
    impossible to forget
    every thought inside my head leads back to you
    its hard to just move on
    i can't seem to block you out
    its funny but i don't know what to do
    when it came to being strong
    that was your place
    and now nothing in my world seems to be right
    i thought i could replace you
    thought i could do this on my own
    but now i sit regretting our last fight
    why was it that we broke up
    i can't seem to see it now
    but then again it always worked that way
    i try to push you out
    lock it all away in side
    but it seems that i wanted you to stay

    Submitted on 2006-11-25 15:11:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, this is pretty good. I like it. very expressive. I can feel the sadness and the longing.

    I think there is something missing though. I just can't help feeling that. I really feel something needs to be added but I dont know what.
    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by Desolate_beauty | [ Reply to This ]

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