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    dots Submission Name: THIS IS PERFECTdots
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    Author: HECATE_Sservant
    ASL Info:    20/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 126/142/44
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 438
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 833



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       There's so much more to say. But no more words to explain. I'm in love. End of story...


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    dotsTHIS IS PERFECTdots
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    The lights are dimmed.
    Your eyes meet mine.
    Something that simple
    could make me cry.

    Because all at once it hits me,
    that you love me for who I am.
    You see through all the fuck-ups and imperfections,
    and you find something good.

    It just still amazes me that something good, I have inside, is worth your time and love...

    I kiss your soft, sweet lips and sink down in the sheets, as your warmth fills me.

    It's your love that gives me life.
    I was a corpse before you came,
    but you've brought me back,
    and given me a life worth living.

    Right now, I'm looking ridiculus.
    Oh! But here comes your smile.
    This all just feels so perfect.
    Will you stay with me awhile?




    Submitted on 2006-11-25 15:48:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lovely, it reminds me of how i felt with my old lover, i still feel the same for him but he is gone from me now. its a lovely poem dear, and love is a great thing isnt it?
    bloodymary~~~>
    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by BloodyMary87 | [ Reply to This ]
      now this is what it's all about.... the little things.this is great. i love the description you give for this piece, too. says it all really.
    excellent stuff...i enjoyed this.
    michelle
    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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