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    dots Submission Name: Forever Lostdots
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    Author: Kasper187
    ASL Info:    24 m Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.03 - 71/64/43
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 965
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1442



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    dotsForever Lostdots
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    Forever Lost within this hopeful dream
    When will this fear fall away from me
    Live this life with so much weight on my mind
    Who knows why this dark pain is so unkind

    Search for ways to lose myself
    Finding less and less without any help
    Truth is this pain is mine only mine
    Happiness so blind to me I can't see the signs

    Forever Lost within my deep sorrows
    Dreaming of the day there is a light inside
    Maybe all of this darkness is for a reason, for tomorrow
    Maybe it will all go away and slowly subside

    Forever Lost inside this hopeful dream
    If life is love then let me live
    Because so much inside is dead to me
    If life is pain there is so much of it within me

    Forever Lost in the darkness within
    Take this pain away when will it end
    Show me how to live on my own
    So much fear inside , I don't want to die alone

    Loneliness subsides , pain collides
    Come take away this pain
    Show me a love , show me a way
    Take me above , and let me pray

    Miles and miles away from happiness
    When will this pain love me any less
    I guess somehow it is a part of me
    Because when I close my eyes ,it is all I see...


    2006 Anthony Paul Garcia/
    -SorrowsNomdeplume




    Submitted on 2006-11-25 22:07:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this poem it's really catchy. I also love the ending as well.
    Keep it up hun,
    Jenny
    | Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by Darklonelygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this piece, again it feels so sad and it just keeps your attention right to the very end. good write. joanna
    | Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this because I found it really easy to get pulled into and it even brought forth memories from my past, as well as some strong emotions. It also made me think of a close friend the thoughts were brought out so much in this it brought back all I had heard reading this.
    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by FLHgg | [ Reply to This ]
      I must say that it's quite good. Although I'm not a fan of rhyming poems, I admire your descriptiveness.
    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by Danae | [ Reply to This ]


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