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    dots Submission Name: As time passes bydots
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    Author: Kasper187
    ASL Info:    24 m Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.03 - 71/64/43
    Words: 363
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 686
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    As time passes by
    I sit back and look at the life in front of me
    So many choices to be made I could cry
    So much lonely uncertainty
    Should I embrace her as my future
    And not let her get hurt at all
    I could find a way to let her
    I care so much already I hope I don't fall
    She is there somewhere in my future and in my mind
    Sorry loneliness of the pain of lost chances, all for why
    Dreaming of her in my arms and forever mine
    As time passes by

    The tears cried have never lost sight
    Lost chances speak in the wind
    Like the still of the night
    And the pain when it ends
    Many lights shine as lost hearts cry
    When the shadows fall and show no mercy
    A war rages on with the dreams in the sky
    And within his heart searching for a destiny
    Sadness in the soul, all for why
    So much loneliness I could cry
    As I look at life
    As time passes by

    The sounds of broken hearts falling
    So silent the fall so saddening the emotions inside
    The tears cried show pain like no other calling
    But there is hope in dreams and smiles that no longer hide
    Because happiness is deserved and shown in the moonlight
    Praying for the day the loneliness finally says goodbye
    Knowing inside the tears can't fall forever in the dark of night
    As time passes by

    The world I search within cannot see
    Blinded by the loud voice of confusion
    Maybe it will be found inside of me
    Where broken glass shows fading illusions
    Of an old love lost and a new love found
    Dreaming of her warm embrace
    As I close my eyes and imagine the sound
    Of her heart beating so close to the place
    inside me where my heart shines and I now know why
    As I look at life
    As time passes by...

    2006 Anthony Paul Garcia/
    -SorrowsNomdeplume




    Submitted on 2006-11-25 23:03:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is absolutely beautiful
    I mean this write is extremely well written and you definately captured that feeling of Love that so many of us try to capture in words
    I Love how you showed when Love is in your life it never truly disapeers its always there to look back to when your feeling depressed or low
    I really enjoyed this
    I Look forward to reading more of your poetry
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my poetry and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your descriptiveness.
    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by Danae | [ Reply to This ]


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