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    dots Submission Name: For E.J.Adots
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    Author: Fougene
    ASL Info:    17/m/Saskatoon Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 23/22/39
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 802
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 922



    Description:
       Happy anniversary, E.J.A.

    Here is a poem dedicated to you.


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    dotsFor E.J.Adots
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    Snowflakes, shimmering in the light
    Red Roses, blooming to an extravagance
    The most beautiful of things earthly
    Shan't linger past a fleeting second

    Whence has a silver lining
    Fastened itself to a cloud astray
    Or a fiery sky, rumbling crimson
    Not burn itself to smouldering darkness

    A beauty's hair, flowing, will not
    Stay golden past a century's turn
    Her endearing eyes, beaming brilliance
    True as sapphire until the shed of tear

    When the sight of her, however majestic
    Line with deep wounds of time
    And the graceful walk of hers
    Become laboured with an era's burden

    However mortal the body of hers
    However quickly time has passed
    She shan't forget a love well cherished
    The eternity
    Held true, held golden, forever and ever




    Submitted on 2006-11-26 12:00:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Fougene, you are writing about someone that you love very dearly and the light of that love shines through your words which create a picture of your love.
    The verses are well thought out and you hvae chosen to convey images via roses and light and colours. Yet there is a sadness here too and comes over to me as someone that you miss too.
    And with all things absnce really does make the heart grow fonder and we learn to cherish the love that we shared and the moments we have become precious and pure. In fact as pure as refiners gold which is as pure as you can get.
    A poem of such joy and as i said sadness that will be read time and time again because of its its simplicity and truths of meaning with a joy and much light to see and to behold.
    Best Wishes
    Colin.
    | Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by Colin Douglas | [ Reply to This ]


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