Description: THIS POEM IS ABOUT HAVING TO MOVE ON WITH YOUR LIFE AND LEAVE THE PEOPLE BEHIND WHO ARE HOLDING YOU BACK...THIS ONE ISN'T PERSONAL FOR ME BUT AT THE SAME TIME IT IS PERSONAL FOR EVERYONE i HOPE YOU ENJOY....p.s. it's not a sad piece
I GOTTA FLY AWAY -------------------------------------------
Because you have never loved me
Or even treated me right,
And I’ll be waiting for you to change
For the rest of my life.
Hurting here; deserted here
Holding on to your lifeless,
Hoping tomorrow’s tomorrow
Won’t be like this.
Beyond feigned love
There’s nothing left of us
Nothing on the shelf
but dirt and dust
Only If I could pull
Hope down from the sky
But this close to the ground
The clouds would die.
The fist thick rain drops
fall hard against me
I don’t know the world
Outside your penitentiary.
Missing you may just be
the master piece to me,
finally letting you go
Might be just the air I need.
Can’t be satisfied
with your twisted ass lies
If you really loved me
You’d let me shine.
I gotta fly away
baby I can’t stay
this really isn’t love; it just hurts too much
and if not love; who can I trust…….
I gotta fly away
baby I can’t stay
every time I turn around; you let me down
And I gotta get up off this ground
I gotta fly away
baby I can’t stay
your travesty can’t keep caging me
I’m a bird I need to be free………
Because simple ness
is just a little bit
and what I needed
I could never get.
Too often
I had to cry in pain
Too often
Damn near drove me insane
Broken hearts never
Learn to heal
When pieces of the pain
Are still conceal
Heavier when I step
Almost out of breath
Dragging behind the line
Of your more important self.
I am just feathers
until I hit the breeze
I can’t live at your feet
I need to breathe.
Gasping in your grasp
I rot and die
Here with you
Is indubitable suicide
Longing and wanting
Perishing on your side
Tortured in the sunshine
Imprisoned from the sky
I gotta fly away
baby I can’t stay
this really isn’t love; it just hurts too much
and if not love; who can I trust…….
I gotta fly away
baby I can’t stay
every time I turn around; you let me down
And I gotta get up off this ground
I gotta fly away
baby I can’t stay
your travesty can’t keep caging me
I’m a bird I need to be free………
YES! Another solid HIT from the legendary L.L. Collins. I really felt this one and all it's non-sad parts...lol. It almost feels as if you can relate to the poem but it hurts a little bit to try and relate to this poem, you want it to be totally about someone else and not yourself. Maya Angelou would be very, very proud. Keep up the good work, can't wait to help you actually get that book of yours published. Much love and support, your sis, Uniquewoods
Honestly, if I were to rate this, I'd probably give it around a 3. Some parts are nice, and well-written, like the part about taking hope from the sky but the clouds won't stay there. But then I notice so many errors, and just things that have no place in a poem. For instance "simple ness" should be "simplicity", as there is no such word as simple ness. Second, I absolutely do not advocate the use of bad language in poetry. Poetry is the blessed tongue of dreamers, and cursing really has no place there. Third, it's honestly just quite a bit too long and not very descriptive given the length. Parts of this poem sound like you're talking to someone casually rather than talking with poetry. Look, sorry but I hope this comment helped.
wow...I'm speechless...I...wow...you are astoundingly blessed with a gift...and that gift is the written word...i can relate to this...my boyfriend makes me feel this way sometimes...but I can't seem to get away...no that's not it...I can't walk away from him...I've tried but I love him to damn much...But there are the times when I feel trapped and I need to get away...but I always "fly" home...kisses~Ashley~
Submission Name: I GOTTA FLY AWAY
