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Submission Name: Numb dots

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Author:	Darklonelygirl
ASL Info:	16/f/va
Elite Ratio:	1.87 - 148/90/61
Words:	131

Class/Type:	Poetry/Depressed
Total Views:	96
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	710

Description:
This poem is about how being depressed makes you feel.....numb.

Numb

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In horror I relize I'm numb to all feeling.
I see the beaming sun but yet I can't feel it's rays.
I see the warm ocean but yet I can't feel it's ever coming waves.
I see the cold rain but yet I can't feel it falling all around.
I see that they love me but yet I can't feel joyed that they do.
I see the razor cut into my wrist but yet I can't feel the sting.
Oh, god, please tell me why have you burdened me with this curse?
Why do I have to live with no sense of touch?
Why can't I be like everyone else able to feel, able to love, able to be normal?
Oh, god, please, please help me to feel!

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  I like this. It is very sad, but very beautifully written.
If you meant it when you asked, God will give you what you asked for
| Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by iKnowWhoIAmNow | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem really touched me, particularly the lines

"I see the beaming sun but yet I can't feel it's rays.
I see the warm ocean but yet I can't feel it's ever coming waves.
I see the cold rain but yet I can't feel it falling all around."

It's very sad and yet I am no stranger to these lines, I know exactly what you mean. Thank you for sharing.

Lisa
| Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by Lisa-Marie | [ Reply to This ]
  Ouch, painful and ineffably sad...poetically very skillfully and deftly honed indeed: incessant, potent, all around very nicely pen it was is often an over-trite theme...bravo...bravo...bravo
| Posted on 2006-11-27 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

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