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    dots Submission Name: Losing Faithdots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 671
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    Description:
       A poem about how God lets bad things happen and how we often blame him and lose faith....


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    dotsLosing Faithdots
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    God, I donít know how much
    I can take
    My heart is very slowly
    starting to break

    My body cold
    to match my soul
    My wounds open
    The pain is written bold

    God, why must this happen?
    Why must this be?
    God, please tell me why
    You have forsaken me...

    You brought him into my life
    Then let him hurt me
    You took him away
    And I am left with nothing

    Why did he have to die?
    He was so beautiful and young
    Why did you let him find
    His fatherís gun?

    He was my whole world
    He was my reason for waking
    And now I canít stop
    My fragile heart from breaking

    Why God, did you let him feel such pain?
    To make him not want
    To wake ever again
    The answer to his pain came with that shot

    I didnít get to say goodbye
    Or hold his hand
    Now I am left to cry
    God, I donít understand!!

    Well I am going to hell
    For giving up my faith in you
    God, what was I suppose to do??
    You let things happen
    And now I see
    If there was such a ďGreat GodĒ
    He wouldnít have left me....







    Submitted on 2006-11-26 19:40:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very powerful stuff here. I think everyone feels abandoned by God at some time, for one reason or another. Great job expressing how it makes you feel. Feeling rejected, and denied God's love is something alot of people go through, I know someone right now, a few people actually, questioning their beliefs and religion. You did well, I like this one...

    Keep up the great work,

    ~Kiki
    | Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]


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