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    dots Submission Name: Something wrong with medots
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    Author: Darklonelygirl
    ASL Info:    16/f/va
    Elite Ratio:    1.87 - 148/90/61
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 675
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 895



    Description:
       I spent a while with this one I usally don't try to rhyme.


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    dotsSomething wrong with medots
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    Something must be wrong with me
    with all this hurt inside,
    always bursting with anger,
    and never any pride.

    Something must be wrong with me
    if all I do is cry,
    I can't stop this pain
    all I want to do is die.

    Something must be wrong with me
    if my emotions run wild,
    all this confusion does
    is make me feel like a lost child.

    Something must be wrong with me
    with all these terrible things,
    always there and never gone
    depression is what it brings.

    Something must be wrong with me
    if I can't stop these thoughts,
    all this pain does
    is turn my stomach in knots.

    Something is truly wrong with me
    when I think there's only one way out,
    "Suicide,"
    is all my heart will shout.




    Submitted on 2006-11-26 20:05:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well,there is nothing wrong with you.

    I have always told my kids this.
    There is no one more important in this world,than you are.They may have more material things/worldly possections.More riches of this world/lots of money.

    That doesn't make them better than you are.

    Watch out,be careful not to let your feelings,start to control you or run your life.

    The poetry is great.
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by Postillion | [ Reply to This ]
      You are a great writer. You bring emotion to the reader, I really like that. It is very sad, but I know just how real the feelings are.
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by iKnowWhoIAmNow | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the way you put this one together, and i agree your time was spent well. This piece is easy to relate to as well , keep writing
    | Posted on 2006-11-27 00:00:00 | by Kasper187 | [ Reply to This ]
      I have this feeling alot too. I like this, it reflects emotion very well because I feel I can relate (hope that makes sense) I feel like where Im sad or angry yet I can't seem to know why or put it to any reasoning. its frustrating...anyway, good writing.
    | Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by dawfemme | [ Reply to This ]
      This is awesome! You spent your time well. I know you probably wrote this about you, but I feel this way all the time. Hmm. Scary, but wonderful too.
    | Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]


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