Something wrong with me by Darklonelygirl

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Author:	Darklonelygirl
ASL Info:	16/f/va
Elite Ratio:	1.87 - 148/90/61
Words:	136

Class/Type:	Poetry/Depressed
Total Views:	114
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	895

Description:
I spent a while with this one I usally don't try to rhyme.

Something wrong with me dots

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Something must be wrong with me
with all this hurt inside,
always bursting with anger,
and never any pride.

Something must be wrong with me
if all I do is cry,
I can't stop this pain
all I want to do is die.

Something must be wrong with me
if my emotions run wild,
all this confusion does
is make me feel like a lost child.

Something must be wrong with me
with all these terrible things,
always there and never gone
depression is what it brings.

Something must be wrong with me
if I can't stop these thoughts,
all this pain does
is turn my stomach in knots.

Something is truly wrong with me
when I think there's only one way out,
"Suicide,"
is all my heart will shout.

Submitted on 2006-11-26 20:05:51 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  Well,there is nothing wrong with you.

I have always told my kids this.
There is no one more important in this world,than you are.They may have more material things/worldly possections.More riches of this world/lots of money.

That doesn't make them better than you are.

Watch out,be careful not to let your feelings,start to control you or run your life.

The poetry is great.
| Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by Postillion | [ Reply to This ]
  You are a great writer. You bring emotion to the reader, I really like that. It is very sad, but I know just how real the feelings are.
| Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by iKnowWhoIAmNow | [ Reply to This ]
  I like the way you put this one together, and i agree your time was spent well. This piece is easy to relate to as well , keep writing
| Posted on 2006-11-27 00:00:00 | by Kasper187 | [ Reply to This ]
  I have this feeling alot too. I like this, it reflects emotion very well because I feel I can relate (hope that makes sense) I feel like where Im sad or angry yet I can't seem to know why or put it to any reasoning. its frustrating...anyway, good writing.
| Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by dawfemme | [ Reply to This ]
  This is awesome! You spent your time well. I know you probably wrote this about you, but I feel this way all the time. Hmm. Scary, but wonderful too.
| Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]

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