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    dots Submission Name: Something wrong with medots

    Author: Darklonelygirl
    ASL Info:    16/f/va
    Elite Ratio:    1.87 - 148/90/61
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       I spent a while with this one I usally don't try to rhyme.

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    dotsSomething wrong with medots

    Something must be wrong with me
    with all this hurt inside,
    always bursting with anger,
    and never any pride.

    Something must be wrong with me
    if all I do is cry,
    I can't stop this pain
    all I want to do is die.

    Something must be wrong with me
    if my emotions run wild,
    all this confusion does
    is make me feel like a lost child.

    Something must be wrong with me
    with all these terrible things,
    always there and never gone
    depression is what it brings.

    Something must be wrong with me
    if I can't stop these thoughts,
    all this pain does
    is turn my stomach in knots.

    Something is truly wrong with me
    when I think there's only one way out,
    is all my heart will shout.

    Submitted on 2006-11-26 20:05:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well,there is nothing wrong with you.

    I have always told my kids this.
    There is no one more important in this world,than you are.They may have more material things/worldly possections.More riches of this world/lots of money.

    That doesn't make them better than you are.

    Watch out,be careful not to let your feelings,start to control you or run your life.

    The poetry is great.
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by Postillion | [ Reply to This ]
      You are a great writer. You bring emotion to the reader, I really like that. It is very sad, but I know just how real the feelings are.
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by iKnowWhoIAmNow | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the way you put this one together, and i agree your time was spent well. This piece is easy to relate to as well , keep writing
    | Posted on 2006-11-27 00:00:00 | by Kasper187 | [ Reply to This ]
      I have this feeling alot too. I like this, it reflects emotion very well because I feel I can relate (hope that makes sense) I feel like where Im sad or angry yet I can't seem to know why or put it to any reasoning. its frustrating...anyway, good writing.
    | Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by dawfemme | [ Reply to This ]
      This is awesome! You spent your time well. I know you probably wrote this about you, but I feel this way all the time. Hmm. Scary, but wonderful too.
    | Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]

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