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    dots Submission Name: Beautifully Brokendots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 670
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsBeautifully Brokendots
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    Every day itz the same routine
    same old story just a new title
    i look into the mirror hating what i see
    for when i look at myself i dont see me
    just a young girl in this big world
    with problems that could kill her
    but every day i put a smile on my face
    pretend to be happy pretend to care
    but its all a lie im beautifully broken
    theres nothing i can do to fix this pain
    for years now ive learnt to hide
    to shut my mouth and cover my eyes
    its easy if questions arent asked
    i dont have to reveal my awful past
    beautifully broken yet and innocent angel
    did i bring this upon myself
    should i run away
    im sorri for the truth and the hate it involves
    i cant be me its just to hard
    this gurl this mask it works a charm
    you fell in love with who you thought was me
    when you saw who i was
    u gave up you broke me
    im so used to crying it doesnt matter anymore
    being hated and alone is like a daily chore
    i dont expect diffrent and that scares me
    im beautifully broken i can finally admit
    there is nothing i do that can change this




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      i really liked this peice, i can relate to alot of your other poems as well.
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by EternallyMystic | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked this peice, i can relate to alot of your other poems as well.
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by EternallyMystic | [ Reply to This ]
      I use the phrase Beautifully Broken on a daily basis so I clicked on this poem. Who knew it would be so good...
    I can relate hun. I really can. Keep up the great work and dont let the [censored]s get you down!!!
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngelKat | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, a sad and sorrowful piece of poetry, indeed! nicely done, with just the right amount of mystery to make us wonder ... (I hope that not a word of it is true, however!) loved it ... bravo ... bravo ... Michael
    | Posted on 2006-12-31 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem..I put it on my favs..the first line..I think it should go..'everyday it's the same routine...same old story just a new sence' that flows much better..I still love the poem..Great peice <3 m3g4n
    | Posted on 2006-12-18 00:00:00 | by 2xhatedxsoulx2 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good, but I wish I could of said it wasn't.
    | Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
      don't hold it in, it never helps. this is a great way to do it and you write wonderfully. whoever gives up on you just because you have a problem is retarded, cause everyone has problems. the fact that they're not willing to admit it is pathetic and im sorry that happened to you. no one deserves that. just like you, i've said talked to some people about my problems and they run. but it happens. its just finding someone that will listen and give a helpful hand. if you ever want to talk just IM me. sn's on my page. feel better, and you're not beautifully broken. ^_~
    ~Chris
    | Posted on 2006-12-05 00:00:00 | by interstate88 | [ Reply to This ]
      nice.
    | Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this alot.COnnect with this easily and i like it.Wouldn't cahnge anything about it.If this is really how you feel you should talk more.Just say it to a really close friend or anyone your close to.It's not good to keep it in.If this isn't how you feel then you can rally adapt to the raw emotion people feel and write about it spectacularly(if thats a word) and thats pretty amazing to see.Great write
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]


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