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    dots Submission Name: Sorrydots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 493
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 346



    Description:
       Lmao To Many Poems Bout My Ex Bf


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    dotsSorrydots
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    I Was Never There
    To Give You A Shoulder To Cry On
    Never There To Heal Ur Wounds
    Never There To See You Cry
    Im Sorry I Wasnt There
    To See You Fall
    I Sit Here Crying
    Knowing That Ur Gone
    Im Sorry I Was Never There
    If Only I Could Say How I Feel
    Baby I Love You Believe Its Real




    Submitted on 2006-11-27 01:01:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like this keep it up! <3 Brittaney
    | Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]
      No repitition and in a "I'm Sorry" style of writing thats pretty good.I struggle to do that while you do it as if comes naturally(Which it probably does).

    "Im Sorry I Wasnt There
    To See You Fall"

    I'd chang "see you fall" to "pik you up when you fall" if it's not to long.That's just an add on and probably won't chang this effect of this sonnet(I think its a sonnet anyway).Good write
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]


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