And So I Wait by Amberdy

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Author:	Amberdy
ASL Info:	21/F/TX
Elite Ratio:	4.37 - 240/232/59
Words:	131

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	91
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Wow i havent posted anything in a really long time... Well this one is kind of basic, with scattered rhyming. Theres no set pattern, but thats usually how I write. I might revise it some more but for now please let me know what you think. Im open for any suggestions and comments. I dont usually like to use stanzas so im not worried about that at all. And the punctuation isnt a big deal either.
Thanks.

And So I Wait dots

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You keep me awake
but you arent here,
you keep me wishing
waiting
to be face to face,
it could be raining,
i could ruin my favorite shoes,
it wouldnt matter
just to be with you.
My mascara could pour too,
I wouldnt mind
not that time,
as long as i had you.
I'd give anything
to not feel so alone
dreaming things would change
and that you would come on home.
It feels like forever
since I last saw your silly smile,
felt your touch,
its been a while.
And I'm waiting,
I feel like an impatient child
sitting on the curb
anticipating the arrival
of the ice cream truck,
with no such luck.
The chance was lost,
I'll keep my fingers crossed
and wait.
For you.

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  we all wait for something or someone... to come give us that ice-cream glow of affection and smiles. yet, do you think that we might just have to go find it ourselves, that one has to be proactive in these matters? i think so. i think we all need to wake up a bit more at times and see and feel the world as a kitten to stroke, to coo over, and just... be.

i'm finding that state of being an interesting path to walk along. it's a beautiful place. one of surprises which aren't quite surprises, one of rejuvenation and spring and green branches.

find it, y'hear?
aye.
| Posted on 2008-11-27 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]
  Girl I love you writings!! This piece brought me back to really the last four years of my life. My ex boyfriend..who I dated for 4 years...was in the Marine Corps so he was NEVER home..so I missed him all the time..and I WAITED all the time. I can remember thinking that it had been forever since I'd seen his face or touched him or anything..it's hard..but when we do finally get to see them again..it's amazing. Great write again! ~hailie~
| Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
  awww this is really sweet. First of all I really like the title And so I wait because it seems like your poem is summerized in those four words. Its like you care so much about this person that it doesnt matter what happens to you just as long as you have those few precious moments with them. I like the way you painted me a picture describing how much they mean to you and how you wouldnt care about the everyday things. I also liked the way you connected the child waiting for the ice cream truck because it shows that your inner self yearns so much for that person's company that thats what you can compare it to.
| Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]
  awww this is really sweet. First of all I really like the title And so I wait because it seems like your poem is summerized in those four words. Its like you care so much about this person that it doesnt matter what happens to you just as long as you have those few precious moments with them. I like the way you painted me a picture describing how much they mean to you and how you wouldnt care about the everyday things. I also liked the way you connected the child waiting for the ice cream truck because it shows that your inner self yearns so much for that person's company that thats what you can compare it to.
| Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]
  awww this is really sweet. First of all I really like the title And so I wait because it seems like your poem is summerized in those four words. Its like you care so much about this person that it doesnt matter what happens to you just as long as you have those few precious moments with them. I like the way you painted me a picture describing how much they mean to you and how you wouldnt care about the everyday things. I also liked the way you connected the child waiting for the ice cream truck because it shows that your inner self yearns so much for that person's company that thats what you can compare it to.
| Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]

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