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    dots Submission Name: As A Ghostdots
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    Author: mrmundane
    ASL Info:    20/m/vancouver bc
    Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 47/96/78
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAs A Ghostdots
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    gone ghost arise
    the future is obsolete
    the money that ails
    is the cage you must deceit

    in crowds i lose you
    in casualty streets
    and patterns form in faces
    whom pass me in defeat

    systematic drownings
    of this, we all detect
    and all of this we feel the need
    the need we have to defect

    when mornings i awake in panic
    i should have realised the means
    behind these static interludes
    which are the results of media things

    the bill i spent is coming back
    stop worrying me, to cave me at that
    yosemite will never fall
    like him, i believe myself immortal

    come back tomorrow i will feel no pain
    a changed derivative no longer insane
    over thoughts manifesting as a friend...
    to fool my psyche -- to over extend

    and so i shall become -- as a ghost
    passing through this land of the ghosts
    only i am the one in perfect clarity
    and they are the ones who pass through my hard earned tangibility.




    Submitted on 2006-11-27 06:19:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      gone ghost arise
    the future is obsolete
    the money that ails
    is the cage you must deceit

    in crowds i lose you
    in casualty streets
    and patterns form in faces
    whom pass me in defeat

    Was my favorite part. But the entire thing was really good. I have no really advice to give on this one, its almost perfect as it is!
    Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
    ~David~
    | Posted on 2006-11-27 00:00:00 | by D.C.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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