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Author:	Skillessbasterd
ASL Info:	19/withdiseasedstrangers/
Elite Ratio:	4.58 - 497/676/207
Words:	143

Class/Type:	Poetry/Romance
Total Views:	169
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	990

Description:
not sure about the second half.
been a while.
it's not done

Cognative Soul dots

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I can’t see with eyes like these
They’re clouded with my memories
Disguising everything I see
The fog that falls on everything

And my thoughts my thoughts make feelings
And my feelings change the things I do
And this mask I made
with paints of pain
will change my point of view

DON’T LOOK
My eyes are daggers
Cutting deep, inside of you

I don’t need these thoughts I think
They’re stained with all the past like ink
Distorted from the blood I bleed
The cracks that I will fall between

So my thoughts my thoughts have feelings
And my feelings are the things I do
Each time I cried
The mirror lied
And said that I was you

PLEASE LEAVE
My soul is broken
And I’m drowning in the glue

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  I think we as humans really way to much on things like our senses and our memories that we get based on the senses. Like looking at the sun, it may only be the size of a quarter, but in reality it is way bigger than that. One time I got real bad sun burn, at least that's how I remember it, but it wasn't really that bad at all I was told.

I think this piece caputures those kinds of ideas well.

I especially like the lines about how the mirror lied because mirrors usually aren't biased only show what is true. That's a bold statement. Ever wonder if mirrors reflect us or are we reflections of what is in the mirror?

~Musing
| Posted on 2008-10-17 00:00:00 | by MusingMinstrel | [ Reply to This ]
  well, so i check my page and got a msg that you finally posted!!! and i was all like Wooo hooo i have to check this out right now because its been forever since you've posted anything and i've been missin ya...this definitely doesn't have the original skilless feel to it...i'm use to feeling a bit dirty, violated, and a little confused after reading your stuff hehe.

But...

i like the repetition on thoughts and thinking and feeling of feelings. it gives it a bit of a beat to it.

I know you say this isnt done yet, and i'll be sure to check it out when you finish, but the way that it's ended now just doesn't seem to fit. it's like walking down a path and out of nowhere ya fall off a cliff.

i wish there was something more i could say. i dont hate it, but i'm not digging it like i expected...
| Posted on 2006-11-27 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
  this feels like a weaker version of you...
i hope that doesnt sound awful but its not what i have to come to know from you and yet having said that there are parts of this that are damn stunning...

the last lines...
please leave...
you know the ben harper song 'please bleed so i know that you are real'... for the longest time i thought it was please leave and i think i liked that idea better than the bleeding idea to ascertain reality... i guess everything/everyone in my life always leaves and thats the only thing that keeps everything real... leaving...
so the idea for me please leave... my heart is broken and im drowning in glue... is brilliant though it kinda reminds me the nirvana song with lyrics of "my heart is broke i need some glue" or something to that effect.

And my thoughts my thoughts make feelings
And my feelings change the things I do
And this mask I made
with paints of pain
will change my point of view

this stanza interests me because in 2004 i did a year of bible college... just a brief overveiw of everything really but on of the papers i took was ethics and we got to looking at the conscience and whether conscience is a device installed in mankind by god or whether we program our own consciences and we got talking about the differences in peoples lives before and after their revelation of god and how what you feed yourself can kinda reprogram your conscience and therefore what you think and do as a result... anyways... thats a long way of saying that you summed up my thoughts on conscience really well in that stanza

paints of pain...

its really great to have you back
dont be such a stranger ya hear?
| Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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