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    dots Submission Name: nopedots
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    Author: supergirl_in_oh
    Elite Ratio:    1.67 - 29/122/52
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    life is a sunrise, beauty filling the sky.
    The more it rises the more we cry.
    In the heat we crave, pain.
    The wind against you skin.
    All the things we do in vein.
    Still are hearts filled with hate,
    Somehow we still are afraid,
    to lose the life, with are loved ones
    just always a little to late.
    And as the sun gose down.
    To soon for the love ones
    To soon for the friends
    A mixure of beauty.
    just to soon we meet are end.
    And know were here.
    Counting are loses.
    But not quick enough
    To coiunt our blessing.
    So here is what I say to you.
    Mourn the lose of the dead.
    Empty heart and empty mind.
    Remember the comforting words they all said.
    They say its okay, everyone dies
    The say just remember everyone cries.
    Remember the dead, live for every breathe.
    Live life to the fullest, and dont be afraid of death




    Submitted on 2006-11-27 19:48:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      tox is right about that, very different for your general style, but i like it dear! you did have a few spelling mistakes: loses, is lossed i think, vein is vain...i think that's about it...

    other than that i loved it! good message hun.!
    i'm sorry this is short, but i have to go for a bowling match...

    ~chaos~

    i hope i can get ahold of you soon!!!
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by whispered_chaos | [ Reply to This ]
      "To coiunt our blessing."

    I believe you meant 'count' there.
    This was a bit of a change of style for you here, and I like it very much...I'm sorry...I'm rather short for words on this one...

    *tox*
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]



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