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Shadows of an Open Heart

Author: Kasper187
ASL Info:    24 m Texas
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Words: 114
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Should I make this one longer?

Shadows of an Open Heart

Shadows of an Open Heart
© ©2006 Anthony Paul Garcia/

Shadows of an Open Heart
I walk alone and feel it within
The emptiness tearing me apart
Maybe it will come to an end

I walk alone shrouded with rain
Along the jagged road searching for a way
Through the anger and the dark pain
Of this sad heart of mine that won't go away

Shadows of an Open Heart
Cast upon the soul within
Maybe when the fears subside and fall apart
I will find my way back again...

Submitted on 2006-11-27 21:36:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Awesome. I like the semi-dark feel of it. It's a very good poem and flows quite nicely, giving the reader an interesting perspective of the overall tone of the poem.
| Posted on 2006-11-27 00:00:00 | by †Condemned† | [ Reply to This ]

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