I liked this piece, very intriguing and well expressed, the meter was up and you managed to keep the reader interested, while reading it, very emotional, sad and was very in depth going, it was very powerful, I liked it very much.
I liked how you put yourself in the darkness, afraid to go into the light, I liked the imagery, it had a certain forced playful intended ring to it,
There was alittle break in flow in some areas,
"its derry cell i have no faith my hope has run dry theres nothing left to do"
Oksy here you say u have given up on hope, and is crawling in the dark, and have given up trying to stand up or something.
"i will never give up you are my love i wil bring the light to you i will bath you in the heat"
But here you say that you will never give up. Is that a sign to sudden new courage.
"i have no point my will is gone but please dont leave you are my silver lining you are my hope your my faith your my love my life"
I liked the ending, very well written, and loved the twist of this,. like this "love" isnt there, then is, and is about to leave again.
Its was a very intriguin read with very lovely images, and was very sad in the same time..