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    dots Submission Name: Lifting you into the Starlightdots

    Author: darkeveris
    ASL Info:    19/F/Someplace silent
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 34/62/38
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLifting you into the Starlightdots

    In order to save you
    Two wrists will be slit
    In order to envoke your tears
    Friendship will be destroyed
    In order to keep your wings
    Corrupted hearts will perish
    To keep you safe from everything
    Impregnable walls have been raised
    Pale angel with cracked diamond wings
    When you are alone in your godless stance
    When your transparent feathers fly
    Everything to taint your beauty will have died
    To put you in the models light
    At the expense of my life
    I give to you your life, perfection

    Submitted on 2006-11-28 18:59:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The structure you used seems so original and creative...Im impressed...It was well written with careful chosen descriptive words and nouns..I'm sure writing like this is becoming natural for you..your work has been elevated since i last read your writings...(not that they werent good before).

    Nice write once again...

    keep em coming

    Sincerely, .......u know who
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      i find this piece to be disturbing,
    but also enjoyable
    typo "envoke" => evoke
    the design of this poem was very unique.
    great imagry too
    thumbs up
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by simpson kid | [ Reply to This ]
      i don't think this is upsetting, i think it's pretty f'in good. i dig the structure of this poem and the flow is quite good, so i don't know, but i like it.
    | Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]

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