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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: Lil gal
    ASL Info:    32/F-ya/here
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 355/216/36
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 915
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       wrote this after working 3 11-7's in a row, forgive me.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    The lunacy the brain contrives,
    the progression of thought..astounds.

    Light to dark,
    death to life,
    thee eternal cycle.

    One can't be,
    without the other.
    the exact circle.


    Simple in it's complexity,
    the cycle continues.

    Submitted on 2006-11-28 19:51:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice contrasts of inevitibles
    | Posted on 2007-03-21 00:00:00 | by HappyBuddaH | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, this is deep without being too technical.
    | Posted on 2006-12-05 00:00:00 | by xgirlxbassistx | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm liking this...I love you're words Lil gal!
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]
      That was good you should of wrote more that would of been cool kind of short tho, over all its ok good write, ty
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good poem
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by TeeTee | [ Reply to This ]
      cool and one more word wow
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by b-rabbit | [ Reply to This ]
      pretty good! ! :)
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      The mind works in wonderful ways with no sleep, doesnt it? Lol Very nice I like
    5th line down you spelled eternal wrong (sorry im the [censored] for grammar lol) Lil confused~is this about the times changing or was there a passing this wknd? Dont know cause I kinda got both out of this. Good job luv. :)
    | Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by DesecratedDream | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, This is Good, but I got alittle lost in the first line....maybe t'is just me, or i dunno.
    "The lunacy the brain contrives",
    between lunacy and the, is there supposed to be an "of"
    ...the cycle of life, writting in such a simple form. Contrasting from morning to dark....from being born...to dying. ah...can't live without the other...or just invetiable. thanks..for reading my stuff also.
    | Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by rAbit | [ Reply to This ]

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