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A taste of you

Author: lah
ASL Info:    20/F/Thousand oaks
Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 26 /47 /36
Words: 150
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Passion
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Yah it needs work

A taste of you

If I could get a taste of you
I’d break out in a dance routine
I’d make your body sway
I’d get your heart to race
And watch you drive yourself insane

If I could get a taste of you
I’d break out in a trance
I’d have your body mesmerized
as my hands unzip your pants

If I could get a taste of you
I’d break out in a song
I’d hit the high notes for you baby
I’d let your hands grip tight
While I have you screaming at the top of your lungs

If I could get a taste of you
I’d break out in a crave
I’d drown in every drive
I’d given your mouth a pair of lips
Which ever you decide


If only you could have a taste of me

Submitted on 2006-11-28 22:10:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love the story this piece seems to tell. I also enjoyed the ending- it leaves the audience hanging, and just as it should in a piece such as this :) Awesome job!
| Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by DamageAddict | [ Reply to This ]

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