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    dots Submission Name: Paindots
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    Author: Lover girl
    ASL Info:    17, female
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83/54/24
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 720
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 462



    Description:
       A poem about my first real boyfriend. The first person to really break my heart


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    dotsPaindots
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    My love was deep
    My love was strong
    But now my love is to far gone
    To save you from this painful fate
    I'll sit back and hate you for everything you didn't keep to me
    I'm paying you back
    Can't you see
    You broke my heart
    It's time to pay
    You know death never comes to play
    So take watch on the next full moon
    For that's when death will come for you




    Submitted on 2006-11-28 22:59:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      1st...My comment on your"Mood: Confused"
    I never give advise and never will.But I do give my opinon as food for thought.
    Becareful with what others say.
    It dosen't hurt to take it all in.
    But your choice in matters are yours and not others.
    You have alot of life left to live.
    Each day will brings something new to learn.
    This little word we use called love.Is miss used by many and miss undestood by more(such as your boyfriend).

    2nd...Your poem
    Rhyme,Rhythm and follow is good.
    As well as content.
    Emotion can be felt in your words.
    Poetry from the heart.
    Good job
    Good luck with your walk in this life and keep your eyes open to the lessons it brings.

    Postillion


    | Posted on 2007-01-02 00:00:00 | by Postillion | [ Reply to This ]
      wow..i felt the pain in that..im so sorry
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by TeenaSuicide | [ Reply to This ]


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