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Pain


Author: Lover girl
ASL Info:    17, female
Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83 /54 /24
Words: 76
Class/Type: Poetry /BrokenHeart
Total Views: 1054
Average Vote:    5.0000
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Description:


A poem about my first real boyfriend. The first person to really break my heart


Pain



My love was deep
My love was strong
But now my love is to far gone
To save you from this painful fate
I'll sit back and hate you for everything you didn't keep to me
I'm paying you back
Can't you see
You broke my heart
It's time to pay
You know death never comes to play
So take watch on the next full moon
For that's when death will come for you




Submitted on 2006-11-28 22:59:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  1st...My comment on your"Mood: Confused"
I never give advise and never will.But I do give my opinon as food for thought.
Becareful with what others say.
It dosen't hurt to take it all in.
But your choice in matters are yours and not others.
You have alot of life left to live.
Each day will brings something new to learn.
This little word we use called love.Is miss used by many and miss undestood by more(such as your boyfriend).

2nd...Your poem
Rhyme,Rhythm and follow is good.
As well as content.
Emotion can be felt in your words.
Poetry from the heart.
Good job
Good luck with your walk in this life and keep your eyes open to the lessons it brings.

Postillion


| Posted on 2007-01-02 00:00:00 | by Postillion | [ Reply to This ]
  wow..i felt the pain in that..im so sorry
| Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by TeenaSuicide | [ Reply to This ]


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