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(from me) Unlike You


Author: Kasper187
ASL Info:    24 m Texas
Elite Ratio:    2.03 - 71 /64 /43
Words: 253
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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written when i was in a long distance relationship with someone, Just think if she was reading this and thought i found someone what her reaction would be...


(from me) Unlike You



(from me) Unlike You
© ©2006 Anthony Paul Garcia/
-SorrowsNomdeplume

While you were away (from me)
Something changed inside of me
I search to find the words to say
But the emptiness inside is all I see

While you were away (from me)
I found someone new
Seems she is there for me always
Unlike you

While you were away (from me)
I thought about how much I love you
I thought my heart would show me a way
But everything it comes up with is untrue

While you were away (from me)
I have felt so much fear inside
That someone is going to take you away from me
Because of the love you may not feel inside

While you were away (from me)
I realized you deserve for me to be there for you
Am I foolish to think you will stay
Even though I am not there to show I love you?

While you were away (from me)
I got lost in a dream
Where the love you say you hold
Was not as real as it seemed

While you were away(from me)
I found someone new
Seems she is there for me always
Unlike you

Maybe its my heart she could steal
If it was only true
But she is not real
Because I am in love with you...




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  interesting... im in a long distance relationship and when i see things like this i wonder if it could happen to me... but then i realize it doesnt matter because if it happens it does for a reason... and then theres the issue of trust... it has to be strong
Katana
| Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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