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Crying Eyes/Sad Heart

Author: Kasper187
ASL Info:    24 m Texas
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Words: 140
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Crying Eyes/Sad Heart

Crying Eyes/Sad Heart
© ©2006 Anthony Paul Garcia/

Fall away your crying eyes
Hearts of gold linked together
Shades of grey deep inside
Lost my mind now dark forever

Don't judge that in which you do not understand
Because the words said will remain
They will remain true by minds' command
And this soul inside will behold the pain...

...of the everlasting dreams of a sad heart
...the faithful hope awakening lone desire
...the dark chains tearing me apart
...And as the tears fall my heart cries for her

Fall away your crying eyes
Happiness and love within the mind
Hold me close and walk me away
From this sad heart that loves me always

Submitted on 2006-11-28 23:34:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A brooding, poignant piece of poetry concening uncertain love...some fine poetic images created here, some nice turns of phrases...the over all effect is quite excellent...bravo...bravo...
| Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
  this was a beautiful poem as well. you have a real talent for writing and i hope you will continue to write for us. great job. joanna
| Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]

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