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    dots Submission Name: Brokendots
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    Author: Lover girl
    ASL Info:    17, female
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83/54/24
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 653
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    dotsBrokendots
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    Broken inside and breaking still
    Myt heart still longs for you
    But you were a jerk
    You didn't try
    I gave you love
    But you didn't want to be my guy
    Never coming back again
    So now I'll go and kill myself
    Just slit my wrists and let it out
    I won't even give a shout
    Just slit my wrists and let it out
    I feel so cold
    I have no pulse
    I need you now
    But we will never work
    Because you broke my heart
    You have to pay
    And one of our deaths will come today




    Submitted on 2006-11-28 23:49:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Don't forget vertical incisions for a guaranteed result. Homicide is always a stronger message though, and builds character.
    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by Ratmeat | [ Reply to This ]
      i'll start with this is really filled with strong emotion,
    but other than that, the rythem seems off.
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by Roula | [ Reply to This ]


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