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Broken


Author: Lover girl
ASL Info:    17, female
Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83 /54 /24
Words: 99
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Description:




Broken



Broken inside and breaking still
Myt heart still longs for you
But you were a jerk
You didn't try
I gave you love
But you didn't want to be my guy
Never coming back again
So now I'll go and kill myself
Just slit my wrists and let it out
I won't even give a shout
Just slit my wrists and let it out
I feel so cold
I have no pulse
I need you now
But we will never work
Because you broke my heart
You have to pay
And one of our deaths will come today




Submitted on 2006-11-28 23:49:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Don't forget vertical incisions for a guaranteed result. Homicide is always a stronger message though, and builds character.
| Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by Ratmeat | [ Reply to This ]
  i'll start with this is really filled with strong emotion,
but other than that, the rythem seems off.
| Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by Roula | [ Reply to This ]


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