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    dots Submission Name: All Her Bulldots
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    Author: Glassy Eyed
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 550/427/187
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 227
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 467



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    dotsAll Her Bulldots
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    Her meaningful looks,
    And desperate pleads
    And mournful sighs,
    Meant nothing to me.

    Her hysterical cry’s
    Filled with lament
    Everything she said,
    She never meant.

    The knowledge that,
    She couldn’t really care less,
    Made me not give a shit,
    But gave me stress,

    Because in my heart,
    I really did love her,
    Or maybe I just loved,
    What we were.




    Submitted on 2006-11-29 11:27:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think you've collectively enveloped this relationship between yourself and this other woman but, I'm not sure the intracacies or nature of that relationship are revealed to a capacity that's relevent in this poem?

    I feel only partially informed of your relationship not in terms of specific details but in terms of the disfunctional connection you share/d with her.

    I would love to see this expanded and more indepth. It has has a huge potential I feel.
    | Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by danativ | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was an excellent peice of work, the emotions were clear and the flow was ify but overall nice,

    Great work

    please read/ comment/vote forienger
    | Posted on 2006-12-11 00:00:00 | by aNNmARIE | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well done some fine rhyme and meter...(if you were to change line two to read "Each desperate plea..." you could get a perfect rhyme with "me" in line 4)...but it's not necessary...bravo...bravo...bravo...Michael
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]



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