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    dots Submission Name: Memoriesdots
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    Author: Martha McEntire
    ASL Info:    34/f/Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 27/25/22
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 566
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 545



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    dotsMemoriesdots
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    I sit here with memories
    of a happier time running through my mind.
    All the joy and sweetness
    of our love intertwined.
    I'm not sure just exactly
    what happened.
    Seems like memories are
    all I have now.
    Smiles and laughter
    are what we shared.
    Seems like now
    you don't even care.
    I will go on
    no matter how hard it is.
    For it was you that
    I gave my heart to.
    And now memories
    are all I have to get me through.




    Submitted on 2006-11-29 16:23:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Again, the lament of a love gone South ... alas and alack!! ... passionate, indeed, heartfelt, poignant ... nice done short line, not always that easy to do in poetry ... I liked it muchly ... (note: in line 7 you have "is" when, in fact, it should be "are" ... )
    | Posted on 2006-12-01 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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